The part of the picture that matters to you, being you, looks good. 

But you left in fifteen extra themes, a bunch of setup that has no payoff and a bunch of payoff that has no setup, a full layer of exposition in dialogue that should be shown in action and how can you not notice it?

Put your stuff away. Throw the garbage out. Take the dishes to the kitchen. Your spec script is not done until the room is clean. 

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