This is what it’s like to read a script with clarity issues. You can see that there’s a story there, but you can’t exactly make it out because it is mixed in with so much stuff that looks like it, but isn’t it.
To improve your clarity, pick your idea and stick to it. First drafts are for exploring, so feel free to follow whatever path opens up for you. But when you go back to rewrite, it is imperative for clarity that you take out every single thing that obscures your owl.