I will cut half the dialogue in 5 scenes you have written. I SO LITERALLY MEAN half the dialogue can go, I will prove it for free.
Message me to arrange.
“Stay away from the door! I’m going to kick this door down!” is redundant. Consider paring down.
“Hurry! This way!”
seems unnecessary, especially when said by someone blocking the door someone else needs to use to escape a falling ceiling. Cut dialogue.
“That was too close. You were almost a Jill sandwich.” …??????????
Thanks, Barry.